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"And for the first time in her life, she let her mask fall down….The moment it touched the floor, it revealed so much pain, sorrow and happiness….Her eyes were full of sadness but she was holding on. She knew she was strong, but she was holding too much…She let her guard down so fast, without even thinking about what might happen…She knew it's all over. It really was over. She was exhausted from fighting and so tired of hoping. And while she was hiding tears in the corners of her eyes, there he was, standing not so far away, looking so purely into her broken soul, and  just as he started walking towards her, all of a sudden, she picked up her mask again, raised her guard and somehow threw back her tears…. She thought he will walk away, simply, without looking back, leaving memories on his side of her bed, on the pillow where he spend nights looking at her eyes, her beautiful but masked eyes. He was enchanted by the feelings she carried in herself. The moment her mask fell down, he recognized why he wanted to hold her forever. She wasn't really sure what was she feeling at the moment but she did remember all those sleepless nights and all the tears that fell into fire…. She could see the flames burning, and almost hear her broken heart crying. She was broken, and he did it. She was an accomplice in her own murder. She was following the steps he walked but was never able to reach him. And she did hear the sound of a train coming but she was standing calmly. She was looking into his eyes; she had a mask on and was protected. He was walking and walking towards her coming from another platform. That few seconds seemed like the eternity. And as if it were an old movie, he finally came, took her hand and looked her deeply into eyes, he wanted to see the look she had seconds ago and as much as he was looking, he couldn't find even a sign of it. She was cold again and was burning inside…. "Please don't leave again", she said and let her heart unprotected for a minute. She has already fallen for him….He smiled and kissed….And she had her world back now….And they filled warmth on each other's lips….He took off her mask and put her guard down….She now had him….And she….Well….She is me…."
I don't actually know what to say in descriptions :D
So read it and tell me if you like it..The name says it all....
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Clouded-Rachel Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012  Student Writer
Very interesting. :) I enjoyed reading it.

Some paragraphs would be nice, and make it easier to read. Also, you tend to use 'She' a lot at the beginning of sentences, which gets a little repetitive at times.

But other than that, this was an enjoyable read. :)
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dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks...Yes,I know about the repetitive "She" but it was on purpose...
I wanted to make it like a normal speech...I don't know did I succeed in that but I wanted to be normal and almost informal....:D....
Thanks again...
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TheEdgeOfTheSea Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That is so amazing! I really love it, because I'm one of those girls who fells that she needs to wear a mask. But question: why is it in the CountryxReader group? That confused me ^^'
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dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012  Student Writer
Hi,thanks a lot :D I am really glad you liked it...I know there are many people wearing masks because they try not to get hurt again...
Honestly,I don't know why I put it there...I just wanted to share my art with someone and I joined a lot of groups and "Masked" ended in CountryxReader group :D
I hope you'll continue reading my texts :D xx....
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TheEdgeOfTheSea Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, okay, i guess that makes sense
I will definitely read more of your texts... if you read mine ;D
And that's exactly what I did! To be honest, I fell in love with a boy, and now I wonder if I even really loved him. I broke my own heart over him.
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dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012  Student Writer
Of course I will read yours :D No problem...Oh,honey, I know how that feels...But trust me,if you broke your heart,it means you loved....If you want,we can exchange e mails and you can tell me all about it. I am not the smartest girl, but I know how love feels and sometimes it hurts also...
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TheEdgeOfTheSea Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
alright, sweet. thanks. note me yours and i'll note you mine.
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otherside-of-someday Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the language.
The whole petic air of it all.
You're style of writing is rather beautiful, I must say
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dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you very much :D I hope you'll keep reading my texts :D....
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