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My heart still beats like yours
I still remember that day
The pavements were wet
But there was no October rain.

You kept my soul between your paper-cuts  
And took my kisses born in June
My soul is safe between your flesh
All of 27 grams belong to you.

And I pulled your shirt to my body
I found your lips on mine
Your fingers were in my hair
Your eyes whispered: "Forever thine".

The sheets were crumpling under us
I felt the weight of your body on me
You know my touches were begging:
"Honey,don't ever leave!"

You love me.
And make me smile.Everyday.
I didn't a thing.
You're here now,you chose to stay.

They tell me :
"This is not the way you should live"
But I have you for my own,
You're the brand upon my skin.
"-Do you trust me?
-No.
-No?
-Should I?
-Yes."

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dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Student Writer
Cupid <3
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VanguardHammy Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist
This is beautifuly written poem! (grammar fail?)

i rarely put things like literature in faves but damn I had to put this one! Love love LOVE! :love:
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you very much :D
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VanguardHammy Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist
:iconfabulousplz:
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AshandCinders Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
I like this piece! It expresses the girl's (I'm assuming it's a girl) emotions quite well. A little editing could make this piece more polished. For example: "You're here now,you chose to stay." There should be a space after the comma.

Other than some easily fixable things, this piece is well-written. Great job!
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you very much,it means a lot...
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:icondeadangel7:
deadangel7 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
love it.. <3
could feel love n pain reading it...
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks,I tried :D
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Love-Hates-Me Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
Every girls dream! Beautifully written
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
every girl's dream is to....? Suffer in love?
Thanks...
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:iconlove-hates-me:
Love-Hates-Me Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
No I meant to be in love. Of course not to suffer but the beauty of love comes in different forms. If that makes sense.
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
Of course it makes sense. The pain is worth the happy moments...
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AutumnRaineAngel Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student General Artist
Beautiful <3
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks :D
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Demonsavior975 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Wow. That there is amazing. I read this and had to take a second to absorb it all. That is just amazing, I can relate to such a concept as well. Your words have put me in awe. Wonderful! ^.^

~Miranda
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
Wow,you really needed time to absorb it? I am proud of myself now ;) Thanks
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Demonsavior975 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
Indeed, I did. The poem in which you created has so many layers and meanings within the words, it really made me think, and see it in a lot of different ways, which is a very good thing to be able to do. It's exceptionally brilliant,I look forward to reading any more of your work should you create more. ^.^

~Miranda
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dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Student Writer
Well thanks...I am really happy about it :D
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irishdragonfly7 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
very nice piece
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you
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Wherewulf14 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
the PAVEMENT WAS wet. Sorry, I saw it one the front page and it was bothering me.
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
It's ok
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babyvfan Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Unbelievably amazing is all i HAVE TO SAY ABOUT WHAT I just read. Fantastic.
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you very much...
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:iconvalamarth:
Valamarth Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Good. I like the two ending paragraphs.
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
They are the ones that came suddenly :D
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:iconisherie:
iSherie Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student
This is so passionate, I love it!
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
I tried :D Thanks...
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xXxShadowFanGirlxXx Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wonderful GJ.
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks...
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xXxShadowFanGirlxXx Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
no problem :D
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SublunaryComet Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow! This is great. Love is... there is no word to descreibe it.
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student Writer
Really?Thanks...
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TheLuridOne1885 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Normally I don't like love poems or anything of the like of it.. but this, I do love.
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student Writer
Oh,that's sweet...Thanks.
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TheLuridOne1885 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
you're welcome I like it because its non tradional.
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:iconclockerzero:
ClockerZero Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Truly a wonderful piece that allows one to delve into the heartache of an addicts blissful existence...
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linas3001 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Addict's? Please elaborate :)
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ClockerZero Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
As I see it, to be an addict is to be enslaved to a habit or to have a compulsive need for something.

In this piece. I believe the poet does a wonderful job of expressing the romantic side of an addiction. In this case, she is addicted to her lover. From what I got from the piece the attraction/addiction is so intense it can hurt, hence my use if the word "heartache"

But her addiction to her mate is so strong she will gladly accept the pain in order to maintain her addiction, thus "addicts blissful existence"

I noticed you have not commented on this poem. I'm curious as to your thoughts on the poets work???
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dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
Oh guys thaaaaanks...Just by reading this it makes me feel proud of myself and very thankful for your opinions and I don't have the words to describe how much this made me happy...Reading this made my day,a perfect beginning of it. :D

I really tried to express the feeling inside of me,and you told me I managed to do so. There is no better feeling in this world... I really appreciate it...
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ClockerZero Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
I've always felt that the best compliment a poet could receive was an acknowledgement of comprehension when it came to their piece.

With your great use of words you managed to convey your message or at the very least elicit a thought provoking response from your reader.

I hope my opinions with respect to your piece were as accurate as you intended them to be...

Excellent read, once again.
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linas3001 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This poet's work is very lively. While it is wonderful, it has the power to evoke real emotions which I have a discomfort of being drawn to.
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dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks,very glad you liked it...
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:iconclockerzero:
ClockerZero Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Your welcome, I thoroughly enjoyed your piece...
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ForeverFox Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this :')
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student Writer
I know,right?:D
Thanks
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Delicatestrength Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful... <3
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dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks :D
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